Weaponised Incompetence
For Paul and John's 47-Words Short Story Unofficial Challenge
Tonya's two-week-old daughter was dead. She screamed at her husband.
"WHY DID YOU PUT HER INTO THE WASHING MACHINE AND TURN IT ON?"
"She vomited and I wanted to clean her up. You complain that I don't help but when I do, this is what I get!"
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Comments (73)
Crikey, straight for the jugular!
It's not often that I'm dumbstruck by a work, but this one definitely got me. I feel like I just experienced a massively violent roller coaster ride condensed into fifteen seconds. It disturbed me. Then it made me laugh. Then it made me feel disturbed that I laughed. Then I just stared at it in shock. As I write this, I'm thinking about the re-read and I'm a little scared. But also hugely excited! Absolutely top tier writing Dharrsheena.
Omg hahah! I probably shouldn't be laughing 😭😆 but I was not expecting that! Poor baby! 💖🌟
OMG! I missed this, I’m sorry!! Of course this will win their challenge🤩 Great on Leaderboard too 🎉👏
OMG! Absurdly enough, this is one of my nightmares as a mother... every time my little guy hangs around the washing machine (and he does it often) I can't avoid but imagine seeing him trapped inside!
Dharrsheena, you're so good at being bad! I have mixed emotions. You did that. :)
Omg!
Woohoo! Congrats on your leaderboard placement!
I knew I would love this just from the title and this is weaponised incompetence to the absolute max. This is some dark humour and girl I'm here for it because the premise behind it is all too true. Well done lovely ❤️❤️❤️
Hey so sorry I missed this and grats on placement. Been battling norovirus for over a week
Congratulations on the leaderboard win!!!!!!!! You nailed this. Title onward…wow! Weaponized indeed.
LOL How could you put all that in just 47 words. :D I love the dark humour in it. A great creation, indeed. And ... congratulations on your leaderboard placement! :D
I thought you shocked me with the first line, but then WTF?! 😂😂 Goodness me! Congrats on the leaderboard placement, nothing could beat this!🎉
Congratulations on your leaderboard win!!🎉🎉🎉
Only you can get away with a story like this, Dharrsheena. 🤣😂😅In time for April Fool's Day. Congratulations 🎊 👏 💐 on making 1st prize on the Leaderboard 🏆
Not surprised at all to see this on top of the leaderboard! A Dharrsheena special! Congratulations!
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Congrats on leaderboard!! 🎉🎉🎉
Oh, my goodness, Dhar, I am so sorry I missed this. How delightfully gross, but funny, too! Certainly dark writing at its finest. Congratulations on topping this week's leadership board!!! ✨🥳
A brilliant story! Nailed it once again! Is it really bad that I chuckled at this? It's just that it made me think about the woman who put her cat in the microwave. On a serious side, though, some people are scarily incompetent, but I'd hope they'd find their one brain cell that would stop them before they put a baby in the washing machine.
OMG Dharr. I missed this one. I'm sending a dozen babies to your house for revenge. So did they go back in time an get baby Hitler, or the Big baby T of today.
very dark...makes a point about how hard it is to accept incompetent help..glad to see you are writing!
Wow!! Nailed the dark humor well with the title.
What a tragicomical short story! Too good!
Too funny! What a great blend of horror and humor.